The Slam: Slammables
That Narrow Mountain Trail
by L. Edwards, Minnesota
I often walk that narrow mountain trail
That winds between dreams and consciousness
It is neither black tar nor white dust
But simmers in sliver mists that fog
The windows of my mind.
Perhaps this is the reason I have never been able
To see with both eyes but not dream with them.
The trail drops down into rocky chasms on both sides.
Sometimes, when my feet start to tire,
I sit on my precipice
Dangling my feet over the edge of a looming abyss
And think about falling into that enveloping darkness
Though I'm not sure which abyss
Is of dreams and which is of consciousness;
Both seem equally dark.
I can always convince my brain
That I should take a chance,
Be decisive, for once
And let go of this familiar, lonely trail,
But my heart clings to these insecure ledges
And won't fling me into freedom.
So once my feet are refreshed
I stand up and begin to notice
Shifting shadows in the silver mists
And think perhaps my path is not so desolate;
Thus, I continue on that narrow mountain trail
I often walk.
I love your imagery. This is a fabulous poem -- so peaceful.
Sep 8, 2010
I love your poem. It's funny because I wrote one a few years ago using the same imagery (the lonely trail, the ledge), but it was really not that good (self-indulgent and depressing). Yours is neither of those two things. It's really amazing; I just love it. Especially the last paragraph; it's so hopeful and beautiful. I could read it over and over again. I'd love to read more poems by you. Thanks so much for writing this.
Sep 20, 2010
I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. (Even with my awful typo. The last line in the first stanza should read: "To see with both eyes nor dream with them.") It's interesting how we used the same imagery in our poems, even though we don't know each other. Thanks for critiquing!
Sep 26, 2010

Slammings