The Slam: Slammables
Fair-Weather Prayer
by wordgirl89, Saginaw, MI
We looked like angels
in our hospital gowns,
waiting on doctors like fathers
to save us from ourselves.
Wanting to be freed
from whatever encrypted disease
was our genetic destiny,
we put faith in a savior
to change it.
We sat on bended knee
with bated breath for a savant
in a white coveted coat to come,
but he's in and he's out
in a matter of minutes,
while we're left with a feeling
like we missed it.
We get the pills without a problem
like a script without a story,
scrawled in hurried cursive
we weren't meant to understand.
This is treatment without reason
leaving half the time
not knowing what is wrong.
When confronting
the unmendable by medicine
we're taught to pray for miracles,
to trust in the invisible
as if death were avoidable.
But the truth is we've collected a debt
and nothing is owed us but a bed
of worm-turned earth to go to.
Does that scare you?
The dividing cancer cell is not evil;
rather, so adept at its own growth
it forgets the confines of its host.
Humans should understand that the most.
Think of everything we've outgrown:
toys, countries, taxes, kings.
When reminded of mortality
we make a steeple of our hands
and whisper promises
we do not keep.
This is very powerful. I think the last four stanzas are quite gripping. When you directly address the reader, it seems almost out of place. But I also think that this is a good sort of jarring. It fits with the theme of the piece, I think, in a subtle way. The last stanza is my favorite, and could almost stand alone as a poem. Lovely work.
Aug 17, 2010
I agree with Liz: the last stanza is also my favorite. But I like the rest of the poem very much too, and the language. You addressed a very important theme in a way that is disillusioned but not brutal. Great poem and thank you.
Sep 5, 2010

Slammings