The Slam: Slammables
November
by roopashankar, California
she's sitting in the cracked brace of a tree,
her eyes quiet like crescent moons.
and she looks like she has the voice of an ocean,
but she only wishes she had that much courage --
to put herself (back) together and yell
until she has galaxies and stars
pinned up against her lips.
her father used to hold her in his arms
and tell her that wearing half-hearts was a sin,
that her soul could break diamonds
and still be whole.
and she wore his poetry on her skin
like little jewels that made her feel beautiful,
until he chose the heavens and undid her stitches,
leaving her with lungs that burned like autumn leaves,
november pale in comparison.
I love this! I've read it several times, and each time it changes for me. It seems like poetry in its truest form. The only thing I don't like about this poem is the last line; for some reason it doesn't seem as, umm, good, I suppose, as the rest of the poem. Not as true. Anyway, kudos! Great write and keep sharing.
Jun 22, 2010
This is beautiful. I love it and I must say I'm very surprised to be only the second person to critique it. I'd love to read more poetry by you!
Oct 25, 2010

Slammings