The Slam: Slammables
Birches
by fireflowerfiftyfive, Corning, NY
Birches bend in the wind
their branches moving wildly like the soul of the restless waif
hair whipping round a visage that holds its silence in
loneliness and secrecy
Wow! I love the descriptive language used in this piece! The personification is great as well.
All in all, well done. I look forward to more pieces by you.
critiqued by Jojo, Australia
May 31, 2010
May 31, 2010
Putting it in a way that allows you to read it three different ways was a cool touch -- very nicely creates the spirit of a birch. Not just a birch personified, but its dryad described.
critiqued by ink.stained.fingers, New York
May 7, 2011
May 7, 2011
Slammings