This is good -- it's not like "prose poetry," where it's just sentences split into paragraphs. I like "of graveness" and "of the grave" -- I think you should change "of gravity" to match with graveness/grave too. The fourth line slightly befuddles me. Is this the lack of punctuation? Same with the last line. "The Chill On Me" is a very sensual poem; I'm not clear, though, on what this poem is about. Good use of the senses!

I liked how you took advantage of the connection between gravity, graveness, and the grave, but the rest of the poem felt scattered. This poem did not leave me with a strong feeling about coldness or about love. Actually, I don't even know what this poem is about. I understand that with poetry you have more freedom with structure, and you can choose not to say lots of things and leave the reader with only an impression, but this does not have enough for even that. Take this poem and fill it out more.

I like the way the rhythm sort of slows down toward the end and ties back up to the beginning. Did you write this for any particular reason or did it just happen to come to you? A lot of the time I don't know what I am going to write before I write it, and it often works out better that way, instead of planning and rewriting a thousand times. This has a natural flow to it.