The Slam: Slammables
Snow Globe
by Liz, Pennsylvania
The two encased in glass
hear their teeth unchatter
in the frigid dream. Streetlight
imitates the moon, if skewered
by silver pole, vined by wayward
squirrels, on their own journeys
to the light, without the wintered pair.
But underneath rushes no heat,
no pulse to their painted blushes.
The sheen in their eyes, no reflection,
merely globs of white designed
to deceive us, into thinking breath
unwithered, and orbs mystical.
I love the way you play with verbs like "unchattered" and "wintered" and "unwithered." The words of the poem give depth I wouldn't have imagined in a snow globe. The second sentence is a bit confusing, but the words are pretty enough that you don't get stuck in one spot. I like it.
critiqued by eponine-pontmercy, London, UK
May 10, 2010
May 10, 2010

Slammings