The Slam: Slammables

Optimism

by Erica, Missouri

It's a cold lamplight
that sticks
to the ceiling above me,
like a fetid leak
from the sunshine factory.

Slammings

This is powerful. It seems that your depiction of optimism is negative, and this negativity is most interesting to me. Also, there is a sense that the optimism is unwanted, or at least stubborn, because it is cold and "sticks." Nicely done!

critiqued by Tova, Detroit, MI
Apr 24, 2010