The Slam: Slammables

Haiku for Pound

by clair_de_lune92, Montreal, Canada

A crashing collapse

of paper pages: the sea

permeates to kill.

Slammings

I never see any good haikus anymore! Thanks for bringing them back. Very well written, and I like how it can mean so many different things depending on the reader.

critiqued by moonbird, Earth
Mar 11, 2010

I love the alliteration in this... the "crashing collapse" and "paper pages ... permeated." Also, the mix of attributes is delightful. It is the pages that are crashing and not the sea. The word choice makes the [book] seem momentous, falling with a crash, as the sea creeps meekly in to insidiously permeate it.

 

Am I right in thinking that the "Pound" in your title refers to Ezra Pound? If that was intended, I think you've done a great job of using his signature clarity and economy of language.

critiqued by L. M. Zhukov, Russia
Mar 11, 2010