The Slam: Slammables
X
by wordgirl89, Saginaw, MI
a kiss
a poison
a porno
a stitch
a letter
a love
a pseudonym
a mister
a villain
a variable
an axis
a planet
a chromosome
a comet
a charge
a letter
a cross
a code
a mark
a treasure
a wreck
This is an intriguing exploration of a common symbol. You're exactly right -- we use the letter x to mean many different (sometimes opposite) things. The very best writing is built upon the writer's unique observations, because it helps readers to see the world from their perspective. I had never thought seriously about the role the letter x plays in our language. Thanks for the insight.
Jan 25, 2010
Wow, I never realized all the things "X" meant. Basically I would think of buried treasure, and possibly porno, and that's about it. Honestly, if I were trying to write this poem, I'd probably give up trying to think of all the Xes in our daily lives and forget the whole thing. Great job here, and keep on writing!
Feb 4, 2010
I love the creativity of this piece! So few words, and so many ideas! My only question: did you intentionally have "a letter" listed twice, once in the second stanza and once in the sixth? The line flows well in both places, and it actually took me a couple of readings to realize it was repeated, so I'm not sure if it's really a problem... but now that I've noticed the duplication, it somehow bothers me a little.
I also think it's interesting how you used "a" so many times and only used "an" once. On the one hand, I like the long straight line of all the "a"s in a row... but on the other hand, I like the image of the axis, too, and of course you have to use "an" there to be grammatically correct. It just jarred my eye a bit.
Feb 4, 2010
AUTHOR'S NOTE:
Wow, I cannot tell you how many times I read this poem and didn't catch the duplicate "letter" usage! Thank you for pointing it out to me. The funny thing about "an axis" is that it comes in the very middle of the poem. There are ten lines above and ten below. I didn't do that intentionally either, but when I realized it, I thought it made sense, so I left it. I will be revising this poem soon. Thanks for all the feedback!
Feb 5, 2010
Now that I look at it again, you're right! The poem does hinge -- quite literally -- on that "axis," and the extra bit of emphasis on that line is perfect. Stet! Odd that each of us can read a poem over and over and never notice things right in front of us... Isn't it funny how words behave? :)
Feb 5, 2010
I love it! One thing that I would change, though, is how you end with the word "wreck." Since this poem is so focused on individual words and that is the last one, that is the word that stuck in my head when I finished the poem the first time. After reading it again, however, I found that it wasn't really my favorite out of all the words you used. I much prefered the words kiss, stitch, villain, planet, comet. They seem to have more strength to them as far as the images in my mind, and they direct my thoughts in an even path through the poem, abrupty ending when I get to wreck. Your choice for the first word, kiss, is perfect. Just focus more on your ending and the images you want to leave your reader with. Overall, though, great poem! As other critiquers said, it's really original and thought-provoking!
Feb 18, 2010
Well, since I'm slow, it took me awhile to realize that the poem was about all the things X represented, and even then, I thought it was pretty cool. When I figured it out, though, I thought, Ingenious! It really is fascinating how many things are represented by X. I also really like how "an axis" is right in the middle. And, in one of the comments, somebody mentioned how the poem ends in "a wreck" and that that didn't really fit. I, on the other hand, think it's brilliant. I love how it starts with "a kiss," something good, and it ends on "a wreck," somthing bad. It really shows how diverse the meaning of an X is.
Mar 2, 2010

Slammings