The Slam: Slammables
Mertvii Poeti
by L. M. Zhukov, Russia
i hear kipling in your words
best beloved
and
i hear tennyson in your eyes
frail warrior
and
i hear poe in your heart
never more
but
i heard pushkin in the shot
only that
and
nothing more
I really do admire you, you know that?
Your last poem and this one are absolutely amazing for the free-form that I myself usually avoid. I just don't like it. Usually. But I love this. There's a subtle rhythm to your writing -- it forms to the poem (instead of vice versa, which is how I was taught to write and what I usually fall back into), like water forms to its container.
I love the thought of every part of someone, something, being made up of different components. Tennyson is my eyes! Poe is my heart! I am an echo of these things, tossed and jumbled so that I end up as something totally different! A romantic ideal, a simple one, but so intricately beautiful and stated so concisely.
Keep writing, and know that I will read it all. Thank you for this.
Jan 29, 2010
I really enjoyed this poem. It's heartbreaking. I love the way you describe an entire person in so few words from literature. This is a real accomplishment.
That said, is "only that and nothing more" a quote from Pushkin? It sounds like another bit from Poe: 'Tis some visitor,' I muttered, 'tapping at my chamber door - / Only this, and nothing more' ("The Raven"). I'm not familiar with anything by Pushkin, but is there another line you could use? Or is this deliberately a quote from Poe? Or this a famous line from Pushkin and I'm just clueless?
Feb 4, 2010
AUTHOR'S NOTE:
Indeed you are quite right, the last line is from "The Raven." I didn't use Pushkin because I was already using his death and I thought that using another Poe quote would (sort of) help with the cadence. Thanks for the feedback!
Feb 6, 2010
Wow, that really just jumped out at me, good job!
I thought it was going to be just like all the other free form imitators that copy each other. It would have been better with more meter restrictions, but I still liked it.
Feb 23, 2010
Slammings