AUTHOR'S NOTE:

This is just an idea I had: to write a poem that could be ripped in two
and would still make sense on both sides. It's still mostly in the idea
stage. I'm finding it very hard to edit because every time I tweak it,
one of the "poems" doesn't make sense any more.

Wow, what a great idea for a poem, something that gets skimmed each stanza. I am inspired and wanting to try it! I really like this piece. The last stanza is my favorite.

Very, very cool. I love the idea. I would like to know more details, but I have no idea how you could add them in without wrecking the format.

This is powerful. I love the feeling that something is tearing you in half, and you still flow perfectly. I think this method is perfect to demonstrate the feeling of love: someone takes half of you, and you let them have it, and they make it beautiful. This is a wonderful piece with lovely imagery and smooth rhythm. Thank you. Keep on writing!

I like this a lot! An idea: make it more of an e. e. cummings-style poem, kind of like this:

The stars are fading____________________________________when you
convince me to__________________________________________go
take a walk outside._______________________________________I'm
awestruck, your lips are_________________________________taking
my breath. I give you_________________________________half of
my heart as the porchlight hums_______________________our love song.

(Obviously without the "___" but that's the only way for it to come out right on the computer.) (And if you have no idea what I'm talking about, find some of e. e. cummings's poetry; that will explain what I'm trying to say.)

I really like this poem. The idea is interesting, and the writing style is captivating. I even think that this would be interesting as just a single poem. If you just read it straight through (with a bit of tweaking), the repetition sounds intentional, and the progression of half a heart to a whole heart in the second stanza makes sense to me. I think it sounds as if the first and second stanzas happened on different occasions, both of them leading to the third stanza. Forgive me if I misinterpreted your writing. I like the poems a lot as separate entities and all in all I think this is very well written.

Wow. I've tried doing something similar, where you read down two sides for two seperate ideas, but they are connnected by one phrase -- yours came out much better, and has a nice, somewhat story-like flow.  I love both the original idea and the poem itself -- it must've been rather hard to get everything to fit as well as you did. Fabulous.